There was improvement from the first to the second CARS, which is excellent to see. Good job. I challenge you to look for scholarly work beyond the textbook to enhance your analysis.
A couple of common APA errors:
- In-text citations should include all authors, if there are less than 6. So, the in-text citation should be (Gill & Williams, 2008).
- If you use a direct quote, you need to include a page number.